Lyrics - for all you budding song writers, share your lyrics!

[Charlotte]

ok, i'm not too sure what i'm doing.
but there has to be a lot of you that are writers, so share your stuff, and comment other peoples lyrics, feedback and the such.

heres a little bit of mine, mine are all a work of progress, or are too terrible to be uttered.

ok, i wrote this song while i was at work, unfinished, and ultimatly a "wtf" moment.

The Perfect Murder

"Goodbye cruel world, my life's over
your cruel intentions plague me no more
words, to his suicide note
blood splattered across the crumpled note
another life lost, and wasted
the detective stands over the scene
trying to see reason to this suicide
why did he feel the need to kill himself

the perfect plan, no one suspects
the culprit slips away
into the darkness"

ok that's not really lyrically sound or anything, ahh it's terrible.